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Him

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His kisses are like raindrops,
that fall during summer night's rain,
The kind that make me want to dance,
and are the ones that make me feel alive.

His magnificent coffee bean hazel eyes,
are like an abyss of silence,
That display the words he can't say,
and they're that kind that blow me away.

His smile is like a Kodak moment,
that brightens up my whole day,
It's like a breath-taking view,
a once in lifetime chance to see.

His heartbeat is my favorite song,
that I'm addicted to hearing,
His heart is my anti-drug,
one of the very few things that I cherish.

My love for him is like rain-kissed leaves,
that are forever falling off the trees,
Which I'm falling for him more and more,
and sometimes it scares me to death.

My life without him in it,
is like a world without color,
God without his son Jesus Christ,
and a life without love and only hatred.

To him I am perfect,
but a perfect girl isn't real,
I may seem like a beautiful rose,
but in truth, every rose has its thorn.

There may be other guys,
but they'll never compare to him,
What he has that they don't,
is my undying love and my heart.
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My first attempt at no rhyming. :)

Note: This was written to my first love, and we're no longer together.
I honestly don't know why people keep favoring it, but please, I have a hard time reading through it.
If you leave a comment, I'll try my best to reply.
I love this piece, but it's difficult going through heartbreak.
Christopher Jacob Tyler Cassady, if you ever see this, please know that I'll always love you deep down.
We are no longer speaking, but these are all I have left.

:star:To anyone that reads this, I'd like feedback on it.
:star:Can you relate to the imagery in the poem?
:star:Is it realistic and smooth-sounding?
:star:What do you suggest I do to fix it?
:star:Grammar errors?
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TheLastIncubus's avatar
"Coffee bean hazel eyes." Oh, how I wish this was for me. I feel you, Mademoiselle. Beautiful description and awesome imagery. :hug: I wish for your happiness. And, oh yeah, "Kodak moment" made me smile, just so you know. :salute: So awesome!